My First Poem For Creative Writing

Brave Face

The beautiful girl,

Big perfect smile,

But no one really knows,

The pain she feels inside,

So she puts on a brave face,

To face the world,

She puts on the fake smile every morning,

Acts like nothing is wrong,

Not a care in the world,

If only they could see,

The scars she hids so well,

She laughs loud with her friends,

But her insides are really screaming,

She wants to hug her dear friend,

And tell him everything will be okay,

He made a stupid mistake ,

Trying to take his own life,

Little did he know,

How if he went through with it,

All the people in his life,

Would die a little bit inside,

But know one knows about that,

No one can really understand,

She doesn't want her friends help,

All she wants to do is cry,

So she pushes them away,

But it's all because of the pain she feels inside,

Then he came into her life,

Yes a different boy,

But it seems,

That he can make her smile,

Although she isn't talking to her old friend,

She seems to still be alive,

When just three short months ago,

That didn't seem possible,

This new guy,

Well he's making a difference in her life,

She feels bad for moving on so fast,

But he seems to make her feel better,

to make life okay,

He's rescuing her from this state,

of just going through the motions,

He is absolutely,

Her knight in shing amour.

Okay, so now I have to critique my poem and tell you the inspirations. This poem is about my friend who tried but fortunately did not succed in killing himself. The girl in this poem is my best friend who was dating the boy. I was really upset when this happened so I decided to write about it.

The last line in this poem was actually an accident. I meant to put armor. But I ended up with Amour, which actually I think makes the poem better. I think this because, the new boy and the girl are kind of dating now. I am actually glad i made that mistake.

This was the first poem that I wrote not for a class. I turned it in for creative writing because I didn't have another poem. This is the first one I wrote with actual meaning. For the first shot I think it's pretty good.